Sunday, 3 March 2013

5 Sentence Fiction Challenge

My writing friend Marie http://marieohalloran.blogspot.ie/  shared a blog with me that runs a 5 sentence fiction challenge each Thursday.  A prompt is given and off you go, it is a really good exercise. Find out more by visiting the blog at the following link http://lilliemcferrin.com. and do not forget to check out Marie's blog and see her entries also. My first entry is below and the prompt this week is Empty.

Blackmail
He placed the gun barrel to the side of her head. He watched her shaking with fear, sweat and tears fell together on her face. Gently he caressed her wet cheek and she sensed his finger on the trigger moving slowly. Click, it was empty. He laughed at her and walked away.


22 comments:

  1. Wow! That certainly packed a punch. What a bastard! Great use of the prompt. So much storytelling so concise.

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    1. Thank you jayne, I am glad you enjoyed it. I loved the challenge and I am delighted to have been told about it.

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  2. And I hope that as soon as he walked away she fled for her life... a sick game this time, maybe next time for real. You wrote this very, very well. It happens like this every day!

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    1. Thank you Josie for taking the time to read this. Thank you for commenting

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  3. Really emotive & captured the seen. I was holding my breath!

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    1. Thank you Kate for reading, I appreciate it.

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  4. A sick game of someone who doesn't comprehend the value of life - powerfully written. Great job!

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    1. Sarah emotional blackmail is terrible and so sad it is out there for many. Thank you for commenting.

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  5. Great story Mary, tense with a brilliant twist!

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    1. Thank you Marie, looking forward to catching up.

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  6. Great tension...an awful thing to hold over anyone!

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  7. What an evil trick to play on someone,,, pulling the trigger on a gun he knew was empty just to have a thrill seeing the fear in his victim's eyes that their life was about to end.

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    1. Yes Robin, it is amazing the evil that is out there. Thank you for your comment.

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  8. She should have known from the way he was dressed it was all a hoax.

    He wasn't going to spatter brains and blood all over himself.

    Have you ever tried to get blood out of a silk shirt?

    Impossible!

    Cheers!
    JzB

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    1. Thank you for reading Jazzbumpa, cheers !

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  9. You told a chilling tale here, very palpable fear.

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